Sunday, January 3, 2010

Adam Jian --Reflective Writing: Object

An object that holds a significant value is a soccer ball I had. This ball was covered with a shiny green skin that reminds me of the scale of a crocodile. I love crocodiles. But no, they don’t hold significant value to me, it’s the soccer ball that does. I love playing soccer. At every recess back in third grade, me and me friends would run to the basketball quart to play soccer; we continued to play as years past. I went to an international school in Korea and students often left after coming a few years while new ones come in so soccer became a way to make friends both in and out of school as I cannot speak Korean. I had a friend that also cannot speak Korean and he was from Thailand. In sixth grade, when he was going back to Thailand, he gave me this ball to remember him by. And with that soccer ball, I sometimes would play with Koreans that did not speak English so I would have no way to communicate. When there was no one to play with, I would stay practice by myself. At the first chance to join the school soccer team, I did. Being in Korea really got me started in participating in the most exciting sport in the world. Although as I came to Taiwan, the ball was worn out, dirty, and was eventually kicked really hard into a scary dark forest/bush/lake with scary dark weeds and beast( not sure which one), but I got a replacement and when looking at this new ball, still am reminded of the past. This object is a memory of Korea and of all the great people whom I had the honor to call my friends.

4 comments:

  1. Albert Liang

    -"In sixth grade, when he was going back to Thailand, he gave me this ball to remember him by."
    - Very Touching

    -"At every recess back in third grade, me and me friends would run to the basketball quart to play soccer; we continued to play as years past."
    - Bad grammar. "...third grade, my friends and I..."
    - I like how you describe the journey of your liking of soccer. Good Job.

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  2. Robert Jin
    "This ball was covered with a shiny green skin that reminds me of the scale of a crocodile."
    I like the imagery and simile that you used here!

    "but I got a replacement and when looking at this new ball, still am reminded of the past. "
    I would put a period after 'replacement', remove the 'and' and add I after the comma.

    Overall, I thought that this was a nice read and I can clearly see that you really like soccer!

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  3. Allen

    -"Although as I came to Taiwan, the ball was worn out, dirty, and was eventually kicked really hard into a scary dark forest/bush/lake with scary dark weeds and beast"
    -Happened to me before=]

    -"me and me friends would run to the basketball quart to play soccer; we continued to play as years past"
    -Me and my friends
    -Very interesting essay. I liked how you described how you played soccer with people that don't even speak the same language as you.

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  4. "This object is a memory of Korea and of all the great people whom I had the honor to call my friends. " this sentence is a very good concluding sentence, it wraps the whole essay up.
    but when you were describing the soccer ball as a crocodile, i was very confused, i thought you meant your soccer ball was insignificant.
    overall, this essay was really touching, and i liked it a lot

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