Saturday, January 2, 2010
Daisy Huang's Reflective Essay
The most significant thing to me is my blanket. It is actually a towel, but I call it "blankey" and I had it for 12 years so far. The reason why it is so significant is because I had a similar blanket since I was born and it had Mickey Mouse on it. After a few years, I left it on a sky train in Malaysia. When I got off the sky train, I figured I left my blanket on the train but when i turned around to go get it, the sky train had already left. So then after that I started crying ALOT. When I got home from Malaysia, my mom took me to buy a new one and I got the one that I have now. I love how my blanket feels and I hug it every night before I sleep. Even though it is still kind of childish to have a blanket like that, I still keep it with me. I have many more things that are comparable to my blanket, like my jade necklace and my teddy bear, but when im not home I miss my blanket the most. So in conclusion, my blanket is my most significant item.
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DAIZZ
ReplyDeletehahaha I remember your blanket at Helens place! :P
Anywaz. My favorite line in your essay is:"It is actually a towel, but I call it "blankey" and I had it for 12 years so far." It just made me laugh and I thought it was really funny! :) I also like this quote:"I love how my blanket feels and I hug it every night before I sleep." The way you describe it just makes me want to hug it too :P
Overall, great job!
LOL it's yerry
ReplyDelete"It is actually a towel, but I call it 'blankey'"
this line is my favorite line, because it emphasized your personality, and the tone of your whole essay seems to be surrounding this line. one line that i would like to change may be the last line. "So in conclusion" sounds a little too serious in an essay with a playful tone. i would love it if you can change it into, "after all, i love 'blankey'......"
"The reason why it is so significant is because I had a similar blanket since I was born and it had Mickey Mouse on it."
ReplyDeleteI'm sure many of us can relate to this story of pocessing an object that we had since childhood.
I liked how you descibed you banket in details and help us visualize the object.
"So then after that I started crying ALOT."
ummm, a lot is spelled seperately and you can connect this sentence to the one before to make this one make more sense.
Overall this is very honest and straight foward and making more interesting and enjoyable for the readers.
-Adam
Awww your so cute daisy :D
ReplyDeleteI liked the line:"It is actually a towel, but I call it "blankey" and I had it for 12 years so far." The word blankey just catches my eye, because I used to call my blanket blankey too. XD
I think you should change some of your sentences because you used to many "I..."
Overall, I really liked your essay. It reminds me of the things I still treasure from when I was a little kid.