For my fifth birthday, my parents gave me a teddy bear. Even though the teddy bear was really plain and normal, it was from my parents, so I loved it with all my heart. I was not exactly great at naming stuffed animals at the age of five, so I ended up calling him “Big Bear”. It has been ten years since I got Big Bear, and he still lies on my bed every day.
Big Bear is really special to me in many ways. When I was younger, I needed him in order to sleep. I brought him to about anywhere and everywhere I went, and I dressed him up like I would to any other doll. I even used marker to draw on his face, attempting to put “make up” on him.And when I am feeling really down, I talk my teddy bear about what is bothering me. This always makes me feel better because saying my problems out loud and knowing that my teddy bear will not tell anyone is pretty comforting.
This teddy bear is ultimately my favorite stuffed animal. It has been with me for too long, and I will never let anyone throw him away. Big Bear is very important and significant to me because symbolizes my parents love, and reminds me that there is always someone out there for me.
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heyy sandra :D
ReplyDeleteI like the sentence-
"it has been ten years since I got Big Bear, and he still lies on my bed every day". it shows how much your teddy bear means to you :) so cute.
I think the sentence "i brought him to about anywhere and everywhere i went" sounds a little awkward. maybe you could say "he was always with me wherever i went". idk tho :P
your essay is rly touching and i like how you gave all the little details about what you did with Big Bear :)
-WENDY
Jenny Tang:
ReplyDeleteHey sweety~ AWWWWW~ Big Bear is soooooo cute!
I loved how you described the importance of Big Bear and I really felt it XD I feel kind of bad for Big Bear cuz you drew on his face!! which you called it "make up" LOL! Anways....for improvement...maybe you could give more description of Big Bear and describe the reaction when you got it, if you remember~ XP Other than that, I think you made your Big Bear sound soo useful and meaningful
I'm Jasmine.
ReplyDelete"Even though the teddy bear was really plain and normal, it was from my parents, so I loved it with all my heart" I like that quote. I'm glad that you really loved it. So sweet. :)
I think you could add more description on why you called it Big Bear.
WOAH! It's been ten years? That's a VERY long time. I like your essay, very sweet.
Timo:
ReplyDelete"I dressed him up like I would to any other doll"
that line made me laugh. i can't imagine a teddy bear wearing a skirt.
i think you should describe your teddy bear more.
overall, i thought it was pretty funny, especially when you typed that you wrote on his/her face
Hey girl~
ReplyDeleteI love your essay and i totally feel you! Because, guess what, i have a stuff animal that i always need when i go to bed! My Stitch! I need him every single night order for me to sleep lol just like you need your Big Bear!
In this essay, i can totally feel that you really love your parents, and also how much they love you :)
I love every single sentence in your essay, but especially this one: "When I was younger, I needed him in order to sleep. I brought him to about anywhere and everywhere I went, and I dressed him up like I would to any other doll. I even used marker to draw on his face, attempting to put “make up” on him." Love it, even though i feel sorry for you teddy bear but it shows that you really love it. And this sentence is really funny, it made me laugh out loud like this --> XD
well, overall everything was good, but you can put some dialogue in your essay in order to make it more realistic. But its already good enough.
well, good job and help me say hi to your Big Bear! jk :)
-Kimi Chen